The Words Were Mine

Hello, all!

It's been a crazy week. But who hasn't had one? I really can't complain, because the best part of my week was yesterday when, during lunch, I went outside and sat at one of the picnic tables by a playground close by. The luxury was fantastic, but so was having the muses around me to majorly rewrite an old song. It was one I had liked before, but having written it in about 15 minutes, it needed the revision I had refused to give it until yesterday. I saw the subject of the song and realized how lame it was, so I decided to make it (a) more relatable, (b) more realistic, (c) less telling, and (d) better.

In its original form, it was titled "Good Luck Tonight," the story of a girl who had always wanted to say that (and the rest of the chorus) to her high school crush, the goalie of the school ice hockey team, but he never saw her and so she was left with nothing but the embarrasment of having been turned down by him; it skipped a few years and there she was, watching him as the big shot goalie on a professional ice hockey team and she still wants to say that (and the rest of the chorus) but she never will. The chorus was "good luck tonight / I hope you stop every puck coming your way / never go down without a fight / the season isn't over until May / so good luck tonight." Lame, I know.

Fast forward a few months later, and the song is entitled "The Words Were Mine," the story of a girl who wanted to tell her high school crush (it is irrelevant as to whether or not he is the goalie of the school ice hockey team) that he is awesome but it came out differently (use your imagination) and so he thinks she is really weird and doesn't speak to her anymore, much to her dismay.

The Words Were Mine

you know I can't stand it when you look at me that way
no smile, just a glance, then you look away
as if I had never been
and it's plain what you think of me

CHORUS:
forgive me for what I said the first time
it was awkward but the words were mine
don't you know about first impressions
if you're wrong, there's an easy solution
just try again 'cause I swear
it's your disdain that I can't bear

I meant to say you'll be great one day
and wish you luck for every game you play
but it didn't come out the right way
so now it's just a glance, then you look away

CHORUS:
forgive me for what I said the first time
it was awkward but the words were mine
don't you know about first impressions
if you're wrong there's an easy solution
just try again 'cause I swear
it's your disdain that I can't bear

BRIDGE:
you wouldn't judge a song by its first note
or discard an author from the first word he wrote
the day is not determined by the morning weather
the block in your road could be as light as a feather

CHORUS:
forgive me for what I said the first time
it was awkward but the words were mine
don't you know about first impressions
if you're wrong there's an easy solution
just try again 'cause I swear
it's your disdain that I can't bear
(the first time the words were mine)
(I'll maintain I don't need disdain)

you know I can't stand it when you look at me that way

If you were wondering how much of the original song remained, it is the first line (and thus the last as well) that is completely unchanged from Good Luck Tonight to this new one, and so are the first two lines of the second verse (although originally I had them during the bridge). The second line of the song used to be "one glance, a moment of eye contact, and then you look away," which I thought was stupid in this rewrite, so I changed that in both cases. And that's it. So it could almost be that it is an entirely new song. Funny.

Opinions? Comments? Likes? Dislikes? All are much appreciated, thank you very much!

Much love, and thank you for the musik,

NBK

p.s. Good luck to Roger Federer in tomorrow's final of the US Open, and to Kimi Raikkonen in tomorrow's Belgian GP (remember what you said, that you have to win it to stay alive in the championship hunt, and I'll be supporting you!).

p.p.s. 66 days to Fearless!